(Dekubaku) why me

a story im working on you can read it if you want (kinda a author check).

The nameless boy

As he did his best attempts to catch even a measly wink of sleep, he had realized that his little sister had left the window open. He stood up from his bed hearing his back pop as he did, he attempted to close the window but alas all his tries were pointless once he took a closer look at the window he noticed that there was a stick that had been stuck in between the window frame and the window itself. Of course he could not remove the stick either. Suddenly something grabbed him then everything went black. When he woke up he was in an unfamiliar place, the place had a painting on the wall that looked to be written in a form of ink. It was still wet and it looked to be written quickly and the writer's handwriting was messy and almost looked to be in a different language. The painting said, "If I were to hide, where would it be on the roof in the car or on top of a tree?". He looked around in silence, then he heard a creak. Whatever room he was in was slowly turning, with each turn it was making it easier to fall into this conveniently placed room of spikes which was at one point one of the walls. He decided to answer the question "on top of a tree I suppose?" The boy questioned quickly. This made the room stop turning almost as soon as he would have fallen in. He then passed out again and this time he woke up in a really tall tree. There was a timer and it said time to hide. So he hid in the leaves of the tree. Soon the timer ran out and then when it did there was something big coming for him and it would not stop until it found him. There was only 10 seconds left and the boy would win the game but the thing had got stuck somewhere. So he decided to help the animal. Eventually he found the animal and whispered "Hello are you okay you seem to be stuck in the hole are you hurt?". The animal was frightened as they had never seen anything like him before. "You will lose the game if you help me and if I see you, you will be put to death by the creator of this horrible game!", "well cover your eyes and I will still help you get out so we can exit together." added the boy "okay I guess this may work" the creature mumbled. "Wait, look, the exit is through the hole!"The main character breaks the hole a bit bigger so that his new friend could get through. When he went through the hole he wasn't back home though he was in what looked to be a gauntlet ring he had a sourd and a pen but he didn't know what to do with it. Then a new thing appeared and it had the full intent to kill. One voice in the crowd yelled "are we sure he can even fight?". The main character stood up tall and made the first hit on the strange animal he was up against. Eventually he killed the beast. Then he was brought to the last room, "I am beautiful but if you touch me it hurts. What am I?" a dark voice slithered. "A fi- A FIRE that's what you are!" he shouted with all his might. Then he woke up, it had all seemed to be a dream but then he looked at himself he was bleeding. He got out of bed and ran to the bathroom to clean his wounds. So he wrapped them with bandages and made sure to clean them first.he looked in the mirror instead of a mirror there was a window, preventing him from looking at his own face. He found a mirror and realized his face was heavily bruised and scarred. "Well that's why you don't fall through windows." Snapped his mother, who wasnt even the slightest bit concerned about his heal and was only worried about how it would look at her having to take her son to the hospital, so all she had done was lay him back down in his bed, or more of just the pile of blankets and pillows he slept on compared to his sister and mothers queen sized beds. He looked over to his mother who was just standing there hovering over him just barely inside the cold tiled floor that lined the bathroom. "Kid, why are you using all the bandages?!" shouted the mother, she yelled it loud enough for the teen boy's sister to hear, he backed up to get away from his mother all she did was step forward the young mother raised her hand high then suddenly the girl came running into the bathroom, stepped in front of the mother preventing her from hitting him. "I will not let you hit my brother anymore!!"Yelled the sister. The boy saw the mothers hand coming down and he could tell it was coming down hard so he decided he was done with his sister trying to protect him and getting hurt. He in the fraction of a moment pulled his sister behind him and once he did that he got slapped the hardest he has ever been slapped, It hurt so much that he started to tear up but he actually could not feel anything. He tried to open his mouth but he could not tell if it was open or not. He looked at his mothers hand,... it was red and it seemed to be covered with a liquid that was, it was red like blood.. It was blood. He took an even closer look and she had put on metal sharp gloves. He touched his face and it had warm blood but additionally he no longer had feeling in his face. He felt his legs go out then it all went black. He woke up to a stinging sensation in his back. When he finally came to, he ran to the bathroom. Locking the door behind him.

This is a story i have worked on and i want peoples opinions on it so ✌