Remnant's overlord. [Being Rewritten Some Where Else]

Prologue

Zeph'rit got out of his cryo pod to hear alarms through the tomb world. The Aeldari had decided to attack HIS tomb world. He rose up and got his void scythe and resurrection orb. His tomb world had just awoken from the great sleep. He rushed towards where the canoptek constructs were stored and got some wraiths ready to attack. Just then the ceiling shook. He traveled over to a control panel and it showed that the Aeldari had entered inside of the tomb world. He rushed up several floors trying to catch them. He finally found a group of Aeldari soldiers battling against some canoptek wraiths. He quickly joined in and started slicing being an overlord from the Novokh legion he liked attacking close up. As he closed the distance the Aeldari noticed him and finished off the wraith they were battling. Zeph'rit instantly locked combat with the foolish intruder. He swung his void scythe in a wide arc to get the Aeldari to get back. It worked and he managed to get the downed wraith to be repaired with his resurrection orb.As the battle continued some necron warriors arrived to help their master.

Seeing this the Aeldari decided to retreat. They turned back and ran across the corridors of the tomb world. Zeph'rit,not wanting them to escape, followed them with the necron warriors close behind. They caught up with the Aeldari perpetrators and saw how they had gotten in. Somehow they had built a webway. His necron warriors started shooting at the webway,while Zeph'rit charged forward attempting to slice them to ribbons.As the Aeldari got through the now damaged webway,Zeph'rit tried to follow them but they shot back with their shuriken pistols. His necron warriors returned fire damaging the webway further tired of this the Aeldari went through and Zeph'rit followed. But just as he tried to enter it started flickering from blue to red. He jumped in fast and his vision became black.

So, what is your opinion good bad in between. Sorry if you thought it is bad this is my first time writing a fanfiction. Leave your comments in what you thought of it please.