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Love Under Carolyn's Dormitory by HarukI_17
(Day 1 - Day 5)

Book Cover - 7/10
It's cute haha yun lang masabi ko:)

Title - 10/10
The title suits the story well.

Description - 8/10
Your description is too long. The additional infos is unnecessary.

Chapter 1 (Day 1) - 9/10
It's funny, I like it:)

Grammar, Dialogues, etc. - 8/10
Your grammar is okay. The dialogues is okay. But medyo malito lang kasi yung ibang dialogue naka bold tapos yung iba naman, hindi naka bold. And you use exclamation marks too often. And medyo masakit sa mata kasi "!!!!!" madaming exclamation marks yung gagamitin mo. Okay lang yung "!!" or "!" or "!!!" but "!!!!!!!!" is masakit sa mata. 

Overall Impression - 9/10
It's nice, I like it! Going to continue reading it! 

Total = 51/60
Not bad, not bad. You have a potential, author! Keep writing :)