The Dazzling Awards-ENGLISH-[#TDASΕ2024]

WINNERS: Fanfiction

String to the Heart by minxxverse
Five full chapters read:
External Appearance (10 pts possible)
Cover (3/3)
Summary (0/2)
Title (2/2)
Association with category (3/3)
The cover is busy but beautiful. The font is perfect. The summary does not tell what the book is about or have a hook to draw the reader in. I suggest lengthening it and adding more information. The title matches the concept of a story with singing idols, and the book is definitely fan fiction.
Total: 8/10

Emotional & Logical Eyes (40 pts possible)
Moral teaching (8/10)
Subliminal message it passes (8/10)
Social issues it highlights (8/10)
Emotions it evokes in the reader (10/10)
The moral aspect could reflect that hard work and perseverance will get you where you need to be. As for subliminal, I would say that you must take care of your body's needs while doing all that hard work! These young adults are being pushed into the limelight, which puts a tremendous strain on them, physically and mentally. The reader sees more of the idol and how sad it is that they don’t have a life outside practice.
Total: 34/40

Grammar (80 pts possible)
Text descriptions (15/20)
Spelling (20/20)
Editorial (10/20)
Text structure (10/20)
Your descriptive wording is standard for someone writing in a language not their own. It could use some work, but honestly, you did well. I do not remember seeing any misspelled words. Your sentence structure needs work, and you may wish to have a beta reader or someone who is more familiar with English proofread your work for you. Punctuation was missing in a multitude of places.
Total: 55/80

Character Development (40 pts possible)
This is difficult to do when you have so many characters drifting in and out of the scenes. You did seem to focus on the two main characters. However, the only thing we know of Mark is how determined he is—to the point of hurting his own body to keep practicing. I would have loved to see more of his thoughts and feelings. With Hannah, I would like to see more focus on her feelings and less on her accent. I know she is happy to be following her dreams and how she misses the home she came from, but I would like to see more of the inner Hannah.
Total: 30/40

Plot (30 pts possible)
This is a hard thing to determine with only reading the first five chapters. When I left the book, Hannah and Mark were no more than friends with concerns for each other. Going by the title and the small description, I will assume a love blossoms between these two main characters. If this is a slow-burn love story, it is done well with Hannah being a composer and the three groups under her care. This is not a plot I have seen before.
Total: 25/30

Total: 152/200

Temptation by Seong_Grace
Five full chapters read:
External Appearance (10 pts possible)
• Cover (3/3)
• Summary (2/2)
• Title (2/2)
• Association with category (3/3)
The painting on the cover is gorgeous and the font is perfect. The summary is very well written with flowery prose and hooks the reader. The title intices the reader and sums up the story nicely. This is a BTS fan fiction.
Total: 10/10

Emotional & Logical Eyes (40 pts possible)
• Moral teaching (10/10)
• Subliminal message it passes (6/10)
• Social issues it highlights (10/10)
• Emotions it evokes in the reader (10/10)
This is a story about a mafia leader in love with a young girl (her brother is part of the mafia) who has just turned 18 and hopes to attend university, for which she just took exams. She gets angry at the leader for something she perceives as wrong, but she doesn’t know the whole story. She lashes out, and he slaps her. The writer shows that what they both did was wrong. You should not jump to conclusions before asking why. Personally, I have issues with him losing his temper and hitting her. I took off points in Subliminal because of that. It’s never okay to lash out physically in a temper.
Total: 36/40

Grammar (80 pts possible)
• Text descriptions (20/20)
• Spelling (18/20)
• Editorial (15/20)
• Text structure (17/20)
Your descriptions are perfectly on par and easily understood. Your spelling seems fine, with the exception of Jungkook, who is also referred to as Jungook. I’m unsure if it is the same name within the culture or if it is a misspelling. Google could not help me with that. As far as editorial goes, to make it easier for the reader, you should not include dialogue by more than one person in the same paragraph. We cannot figure out who is talking. There were a few parts in the dialogue that I had to go back and reread because I was not sure who was speaking. Other than these issues, this story is told beautifully.
Total: 70/80