The hero Re-writion

moving

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Narrator
Spanish
English
It was around 7 AM when Jake called all his kids.
Jake: Kids, come down here please!
Neytiri: Neteyam come here please!
Jake looked over to see his wife calling their only son who refused to learn English. Neytiri understood some english but didn't speak English Jake on the other hand spoke both he wasn't good at Spanish though he did try!! He was then pulled out of his thoughts by feet running down the stairs, soon lo'ak, tuk, spider, and kiri.
Neytiri: where is neteyam?
Lo'ak: I don't know probably in the forest with bear(his horse)
Neytiri then sighed she new neteyam would go out there. Jake looked like he knew what to do, he then pressed the intercom(idk what it's called) on his neck and called neteyam.
Jake:neteyam come home now please me and your mom need to talk to you.
They waited 5 minutes till they hers respond
Neteyam: coming sir.
It took 20 minutes for him to actually get home and put bear away, as he walked into the house he witnessed all his family in the kitchen, he looked around and sat down... Jake had explained they were moving to Hawaii lo'ak flipped out when he heard the news yelling at his parents to change their mind, kiri and spider didn't really have a reaction other than the disappointed look on there faces, neteyam being the perfect person didn't have a reaction on his face on the inside he was freaking out! But he didn't let that show. Jake told them that in 3 weeks they leave.
Neteyam: what about bear? Mama what about her?
Neytiri: son we will keep her don't worry but it's not going to be the same! But we will keep her!
Neteyam let out a BIG sigh and went to go and pack up, their parents had put 10 boxes out by their room(if they need more they can get more) Neteyam was packing up all his stuff all his horse riding stuff and personal thing! Lo'ak packed all his stuff it wasn't neat and tidy like kiris or Neteyams, but it will work! Tuk had neytiri's help pack her things and spider said he will get to it when he does!

Ok how do y'all feel about this??? I think it will be good! I do like you guys feed back! Also I live in Puerto Rico and I do live near the forest close to mountains! My other book was more Mexico (I'm also Mexican) but thought this was a good idea! I can go and change it for actual Spanish but I wanted to try something new! Have a good day, night or afternoon!!!!!! (I post almost every Sunday or Saturday)!!! Bye

-sam