Even more ranting about the oc's.
It's always a girl for some reason. Why? Why no guys?
And the way they describe characters. Just... no.
The pale boy with dark orbs looked up, tear-orbed. The banana-haired guy looked down at him with love and empathy. 'I-I can't do this.' The mozzarella-skinned boy stuttered.
'I'm here for you.' The pee-skinned boy uttered.
'NO, YOU DON'T GET IT!' The dark angle sniffed. 'I-I think I'm in love with dark destiny waterflower luna moonlight. I'm sorry, but we need to break up?'
The boy with sea-blue orbs backed, his hand over his heart. 'B-but Nico... you're gay. And she's your half-sister, remember?'
The ghost guy shrugged. 'I don't know. Guess she's just that beautiful... have you seen her orbs? Sea-green, with gold freckles. She captured my heart and holds it hostage.'
The descriptions are getting out of hand. Just call them by their names, guys! It's not gonna kill you!
Synonyms can be handy sometimes, I know. But please don't overdo it.
Lighting thunderstriker pushed her tongue up Percy's mouth, and their meatlaps danced for dominance, swimming is saliva and pure happiness. Their tongues went on an expedition, and successfully explored each other's tooth. Orbs were closed, and sparks flew, drowning in passion and spit.
With other, civilised words: they kissed.
Thank you.
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How to NOT write pjo fanfiction-rant
FanfictionRant about everything that's wrong with pjo fanfictions. a lot of anger, wit and examples. all character belong to Rick Riordian, execpt Lightning Marine Deathgirl.
