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🌻Legacy of Libby Morningstar: Chosen One #1🌻

🌻Legacy of Libby Morningstar: Chosen One #1 by Fanfic-Girl2 🌻

Genre: Action, Fantasy

Chapters Reviewed: Prologue—Chapter 3

Summary: the first book of the 5 book series Legacy of Libby Morningstar Libby the 16 year old princess of Hell is eldest daughter of Lilith and Lucifer When the Angle Michael finds her she realizes that the Prophecy she's part of has begun.

inspired by Hazbin Hotel and Percy Jackson

Reviewed as of 10/31/24

Link to Story:https://www.wattpad.com/story/368293527-legacy-of-libby-morningstar-chosen-one-1

Review Type: Advance Review, Spoilers

Review: Note: this will be spoiler filled up until chapter 3.

Before I get deep into this review, I want to make one thing clear; I feel like this book would do better if it was categorized and advertised for what it truly was: fanfic. In the summary, it says it was inspired by Hazbin Hotel and Percy Jackson, and while I've never formally watched the former of the two, I've definitely seen my fair share of clips on social media to feel this wave of Deja vu when reading. It wasn't until I reread the summary that I realized why. There's a difference between being inspired by a story and writing fanfic. For something to be fanfiction, it needs to come from a fan of a piece of work that creates a story using the world, characters, settings, storyline, or anything of the likes. If a story is inspired by something, then it needs to have a clear difference, little to no similarities. Having the main character of this story have the same last name as the main character in Hazbin Hotel while following the story that she's Lucifer's and Lilith's daughter, finding them to be good, and even starting off in a similar way...it sounds awfully familiar to the show on Amazon Prime.

There are fanfictions that take the world of something and only focuses on original characters or takes a few characters from a franchise, changes them a bit, and puts them in a new universe. The writer of those fanfictions still recognizes they're fanfiction because it's not their own creative intellectual property. There's nothing wrong with that because they gave rightful credit to the original source material. In fact, those stories can still be unique in their own right.

Had I known this was essentially a Hazbin Hotel fanfic, I wouldn't have picked it up because I'm not a fan of the show (mainly due to the mature content). It clearly isn't the story for me (something I feel should be made known due to potential bias). The prologue essentially starts off the same way, explaining that Lilith was one of the first humans on Earth but didn't agree with Adam; therefore, she got close to Lucifer, and eventually, they were sent to Hell (different from what the Bible portrays, but the same, if not extremely similar to the show from what I understand). Even if the wording is different (and I'll admit, I do like how things are worded, but I'll get to that later), it's still taken from the show, hence why I'd call this fanfiction more so than being inspired by the show.

Honestly, if this fic were to add that as a tag and sell it in that light, I think it would flourish. Even if the events don't line up, it could be in an alternate timeline; something a lot of fanfics do. People would enjoy seeing your take of the show, how it could've gone, and how the characters would interact with one another. You could even add to it that you don't even have to watch the show for it to make sense if this seems like the show for you. I know of a few writers that have done that and have been successful in doing so.

After the prologue, I got quite confused. Chapter one starts off with Libby (who's the daughter of Lilith and Lucifer) in school, but the angel, Micheal, comes bursting in, wielding his sword to threaten Libby. Already, I'm confused and taken off guard. Libby is in school and no one is going to notice? The story said she was in school, so what class was she in? Why didn't anyone take notice that there were weapons in the classroom? If there was no one in the classroom, why was that? Why was her sister there? There needs to be some sort of description, some showing of what is going on in the story to help the reader understand the plot and setting better.