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Review - BHAGYA

Book Name - BHAGYA

Author - Uditasree

Title and Summary: 4/5

The summary is an excerpt from the book, and does a wonderful job at bringing out her character, as well as the importance of BHAGYA, her anklets, and dreams. I wouldn't change it at all, but as a reviewer feel the need to say more. Devi's (or Rani's) name is not mentioned the summary, nor is Nandan's. Again, no need to change, I like it the way it is.

The title you chose is somewhat interesting. I suppose Bhagya is the reason that the whole story ran its course. My only concern with it is that we don't actually meet Bhagya in the story, and she isn't physically affecting the plot in any way. But I like how you pieced this together, it's nice.

Book Cover: 3.5/5

I'll be honest, I don't really have an idea what's going on here. I'm assuming the face with the kohl-lined eyes is "the ghost", and the others are both Devi. None of the other characters are featured, or any setting of the story either. Don't get me wrong, it is a lovely cover, but you have a hard time reading author's name at the bottom, and it isn't very eye-catching. The title is a bit too close to the top for my liking, but I'm not asking you to change it. These are just my thoughts, it's Wattpad, after all. Your call, your choice.

I do like the image you used at the top of every chapter, though. I feel it has a lot more to do with the story, and holds significant meaning to it.

Writing Style: 4/5

This story was a bit hard to follow at times, and I wasn't entirely sure how some events led to the next on occasion. Your imagery is still very good, however, and I could easily follow where each sentence was going. Sometimes I still get confused, but it's likely just the way you phrase things sometimes. I like the way you write, and although you can still improve a lot, I think you're doing great so far!

Punctuation/Grammar: 3.5/5

Most of the story was grammatically correct, and needs no assistance, but the tenses sometimes change. There were few to no misspelled words, although your sentence structure will need some work. I think you did fairly well in this department.

Characters: 4.5/5

You seem to have a preferred style with introducing your characters. To introduce your main characters, you tend to write "he/him" and "she/her" instead of their names. I'm pretty sure for Devi this was because you didn't want to call her Devi until she's revealed to Nandan that it is her name. This is interesting, and a bit confusing at first, but I think that it works for your purposes. I wasn't entirely sure of the character dynamic between Rani and Nandan at first, and even more confused as their conversation went on, but I think I get it now. 

Your character development over the course of this story is huge, for the whole village, not just the main characters. Devi showed her opinions from the start, and when she acted on them, the outcome was huge. Nandan also grows immensely over the course of the story, from being a coward and miserable to being happy and confident in himself. The minor character of Ms. Lekha in a way plays the biggest role in the story. She spoke up in front of the whole village, and threw down her feelings fearlessly. It is because of her powerful character that justice for women was won. 

I think you've outdone yourself in the character department with this one, congrats!

Plot: 4.5/5

I had to re-read the first chapter to realize that it happened after the events of the story. Now, it makes a whole lot more sense and I get it. I completely missed the "A Year Ago..." on the second chapter... I might be blind. The way events lead into each other was slightly confusing at times, but it works its purpose. The theme is beautiful in itself, on women's rights, speaking up, and of course the metaphor of a caged bird. It's such a powerful story, and I love that about it. You've pulled together events from over the course of a year and brought out a story. 

Comments:

I've put a few of my thoughts directly onto your story.

Focus Points:

Try pacing your plot a bit more and try explaining the reasoning behind some of the characters decisions. This will help improve overall quality. I hope this helped!

Overall Score: 24/30