(I could not post entries without my laptop crashing, sorry)
For the first task, I can safely say that your entries were very intriguing! I'm glad we don't have to kill anyone this round!
Any who, entries are scored on a scale of 1-12, with 1 being the worst and 12 being the best. The feedback that goes with it will hopefully explain the score as well as give tips on how to improve. Also, all the people who did not put in entries are in a dangerous zone right now... if you don't put in an entry next task, you will automatically die.
Now, let's see how you did!
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Tribute 2: Mai Li
Score: 10
Feedback: I liked how your tribute was having nightmares about her past victims. It fits very well with her past. I also liked how you balanced the prompt with events leading up to the prompt, which is something I aspire to accomplish myself.
Tribute 3: Skye Finley
Score: 0
Feedback: ....
Tribute 4: Neha Bhavsar
Score: 10
Feedback: I liked how you used your country in your nightmares. With the morbid nature of Panem, it can be intimidating to watch them take over the place you grew up in. Good job!
Tribute 6: Aime Satomi
Score: 0
Feedback: ....
Capitol 1: Gus Octavius
Score: 7
Feedback: I liked how you used a childhood event as your nightmare, since Capitol people don't partake in the games. I would suggest some more length, try making your paragraphs more "beefy". But don't fret, a 7 isn't that bad!
Capitol 2: "Vix" Rojas
Score: 9
Feedback: May I ask, does your character like Gus? Your use of a home event helped establish the background of your character, which I appreciate. A negative memory during childhood can leave a mark for ages.
Capitol 3: Luna Jordan
Score: 9
Feedback: I liked how you used something very traumatic, something that was different than the other childhood memories. The plot twist resulting in a death was very interesting. It also makes your character very sensitive about death, I could see her disliking the games.
Capitol 4: Popsicle X
Score: 7
Feedback: I like how you incorporated your "ability" into your nightmare. I think I would like more of a story as far as the nightmare itself, but other than that, I liked it! A 7 isn't too bad, so don't freak out!
Capitol 5: Amber Dauntless
Score: 0
Feedback: ....
Capitol 6: Berenice Vipointe:
Score: 10
Feedback: Sssuch detail! I appreciated the length, and I literally cried when Luster died. Keep it up Fayth!
Beware tributes, for the horrors have just begun.
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Random(CLOSED) The tributes have escaped. A Gamemaker is captured. The Capitol is slowly turning to chaos. With the help of a few outsiders, and the rumor of a secret rebel group's base, will the remaining tributes of the 80th Games be able to make it to...
