PJ Contests

2 [winners]

Kai here, everyone! There wasn't a need to post the entries, because well, I have no idea how to.

OK, ahem, to be honest, you guys have worst luck, because I'm your judge. Before I start, let me tell you that I am the world's biggest grammar Nazi. I also judge your creativity a lot, so you'll all be getting feedback from me. Anyways, let's begin.

THIRD PLACES [no particular order]

Amayacchi_ It was really helpful of you to introduce the characters before actually  starting the story. Your story was the only one that had the girl transfer, not the boy, and to be honest, it was really refreshing. Nonetheless, you made some grammar mistakes such as not adding space behind a comma, not changing some words into past tense, or forgetting to add a period at the end. 

c1ockwork Nice job. The story plot was pretty good, talking about their promise, giving us imagery of the cherry blossom trees, etc. They were all wonderful. However, your grammar lowered your points. You didn't add a space after commas, and sometimes you didn't end a sentence with a period. 

Thank you two for joining, and congrats!

SECOND PLACES [no particular order]

llaugh I sincerely loved the way you separated the story into parts. The story was cute; I could really imagine them as childhood friends. The only part I had a problem with is where you kept on repeating "tomodachi" again, and again.  Overall though, I thought that it was a very good story.

PaigeKary You've had no spelling mistakes, so excellent job! I loved the idea of putting a history fact in the story as if it was from a book. Awesome idea. The only problem with your writing is that most of your sentences are run-on sentences. It means that you incorrectly joined two independent clauses without a correct conjunction. You added a comma after a section of words, and continued right after. To correctly write the sentence, you should've added an "and" or "yet", etc. You could've also added a semi-colon, which would've worked just fine. 

Thank you two for joining, and congrats on winning silver!

FIRST PLACE

candlelights- I loved your story! It was the only story of all the entries that actually talked more about female friends. It was truly original, and I think that was what I was looking for the whole time. The touch of humor was excellent, and the drama that came at the end was thrilling. It deserves to be made into a real book ;) There's one part I think needs correcting though, and that's the fact that you introduced too many characters in a short one-shot. Five, I think? Adding the transfer student would be six. Anyways, I think that the reader needed more information about the characters, but overall, it was an amazing one-shot. Congratulations!

All those who entered in this writing contest will receive prizes! Thank you so much for joining, and I hope you guys will join the next one!

The next contest is a graphic contest, and it will be judged by thugaboo-!

Good luck!