I was starting to do the book critiques when suddenly I couldn't find my first client. To _B-BLUEe if you're reading this, I'd definitely want to read your story again.
A SHORT REVIEW FROM WHAT I REMEMBERED IN YOUR STORY:
You had an interesting start there and I like how the story opened. However, these are two of the things you'd have to work on:
1. Sentence Construction
2. Punctuation
There are some lines that you'd have to rephrase or reconstruct for the sake of brevity and also in order for you to make your descriptions clearer as well as to make your point more understandable.
Continue writing and don't forget to read as well. Reading helps a lot :)
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MY WATTPAD BOOK CRITIQUES - ROUND ONE (Plus a Valentine's Day Special)
Non-FictionA collection of my REVIEWS/INSIGHTS/CRITIQUES on the works of fellow wattpaders as they have requested :)
