In regular life, people usually don’t talk with the same first couple of words in each sentence, unless they’re pissed off or upset or something of the sort.
Example: I saw Betsy at the store today. I saw her at the store and she was buying cereal. I saw her at the store buying cereal and she bought Reese's Cups too. It may sound dramatic, but who do you know that honestly talks like that?
Here’s an example where it’d make sense: I don’t know, Betsy, why would we be dirt poor? Could it be because someone’s been buying three-hundred dollar shoes every weekend? Could it maybe be because someone’s been going out to dinner with her friends four nights a week? Or, I don’t know, maybe it’s because someone’s been throwing out the bills to keep her husband from noticing she spent thousands on a weekend to the spa! Notice in the second example there was less repetition and the repetition that was there made sense, because the speaker was emphasizing the irony.
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