Literal Garbage:A guide to make a good Warriors fanfiction

Characters are the most important characters in a story.If you have good,realistic,flawed characters,readers will enjoy your story more.If you have a terrible,Mary/Gary Sue characters readers will turn away from reading your book.Today,we are going to look at a Mary Sue I have created and we are going to state at everything that is wrong about her.All my statements about this characters will be in bold.

Name: Sapphireglimmer

Gender:Female

Clan: EarthClan

Rank:Warrior

Appearance:Bright,purple eyes,massive,blue wings,green bangs above her head,a long,rainbow tail and orange fur

Mother:Dragonsoul

Father:Riverheart

Sisters:Icemoon,Eclipsemoon,Darkmoon

Brothers:Thundermoon,Cookiecream

Kits: Warkit,Pizzakit and Silverkit

Mate:Bloodmoon

This is a Mary Sue character I unhappily out together to try and help people make better OC's. Firstly,her name is something we must discuss.One,cats do not know what sapphires are,so this would make no sense for her mother to make her that.Her prefix is also a problem.-glimmer makes no sense in the Warriors universe.If your cat is a girl,your character would be called a she-cat,not female.Secondly,her
clan's name is a big problem.Clans named after the elements are so overused and unoriginal.Even,TreeClan would be better than this.If you have a clan names this,please change it to something else like Mossclan or something that relates to the forest.Her appearance is the worst issue.This makes no sense in cat genetics.One thing we need to clear up,purple or red eyes are not possible unless there is a genetic mutation,but that is highly unlikely in feral cats.Cats can not have wings is also a thing that is impossible.Cats can not grow bangs as their fur is their hair.Rainbow tails are also not possible.Orange fur is okay as long it is a light shade or ginger.Cats do not know what dragons are,so this makes no sense.The suffix river is not a valid prefix as Riverclan has this prefix,so this would be very confusing for your readers.The suffix,-moon,is highly overused and should be avoided.The prefix thunder should not be used as in the original books have a clan called Thunderclan,so it should not be used under any circumstances.Cats do not know what cookies or cream are,so do not use these names.Cats do not know what pizza is.