Literal Garbage:A guide to make a good Warriors fanfiction

Backstories

Backstorys are the most important part of a character.It can help explain why a certain characters cats a certain way,or how a character became who they are today.But some,just destroy the whole propose of a backstory.We have gotten your favourite Marysue,Sapphireglimmer,back with a terrible backstory!!

Backstory

Sapphireglimmer was not born in EarthClan.Dragonsoul,her mother,was a rogue and lived without a clan.After she and her siblings were born,her parents were killed by a group of aggressive rogues near where they were living.EarthClan took her brothers and sisters in and raised them.Their new mother was called Rubysparkle.She hated the kits and abused them.One day,she tried to kill her,by taking her somewhere were the clan would not see her.Luckily,Chipstar,the leader of Earthclan,found them and banished her from the clan forever.After she became an apprentice,she was the apprentice to a sexy Tom called Deadmoon.She was the best in clan at hunting and fighting.When she was still an apprentice,she fell in love another apprentice called Starpaw.When day,the leader told her that he was given a prophecy by his dead mate,Peridoteyes. "When Ice is gone,Ruby will fight Sapphire,"On the day of her warrior ceremony,Starpaw asked her to be her mate.She agreed as the two were given their new names,Sapphireglimmer and Starheart.They had three kits,Warkit,Pizzakit and Silverkit.After her kitting,Rubysparkle snuck into the camp and killed Icemoon.She was furious at her.She tried to kill but Starheart stopped them. He told her that Rubysparkle was his mate and he had a litter of kits with her,Dragonkit,Rubykit and Moonkit.She was horrified and told the couple to leave her life forever.The two flew away together away.After that,Bloodmoon asked her to be his mate.She accepted
his offer.The next day,the rogues that killed her mother came back and killed Cookiecream,Eclipsemoon,Thundermoon and Darkmoon.After her kits had become warriors,Starheart killed them right in front of her eyes before he killed her...

There are so many things wrong with this,i am not going to even say why you should not so that.The character's parents being killed is overused.Rubysparkle is not a valid name.The new mother abusing her adopted children is clique.The character being the best at two different things that are the opposite to each other is an obvious Marysue.Cats don't need a prophecy to make the character interesting.The prophecy is very obvious and not mysterious like they are supposed to be.Cats do not know what pizza is.The prefix star is not allowed to be use fans is not valid.Rubysparkle killing her her sister is okay but I now where this is going.The most important character to the OC betraying the main character is overused and was obvious.The prefix moon can not be used.Her whole family dying is overused.Her kits dying is overused.Then,she died.Also,it is not explained how Dragonsoul has a warrior name when it is stated she is a rouge.Also,the clan taking a random kit for no reason?They should at least discuss it or have a second thought.A cat can not be the best at hunting and fighting as they require different skills and is impossible to master both without being a tiny bit better a one than the other.Chips?Really?