Warrior Cats Oc Ratings!

Darkrose

I haven't done one of these in a while, it might be fun to get back into it!

#4 for @Dripwillow! Hope you like it! Dripwillow's answers are normal, and my replies are in bold.

Name- Darkrose

I can kinda get this name, although I wouldn't give it the highest marks.

Gender- She (sorry so cliche... I'll add male oc afterwards)

Nothing to add on this.

Clan- ShadowClan on canon, LeafClan off canon

It's good to see a ShadowClan cat every once in a while, they're not very common! It also makes the name make more sense, as ShadowClan often use prefixes such as 'Dark', while the other Clans usually do not.

Age- 17 moons 

N/A

Status- young warrior

I always appreciate seeing just plain warriors, must people try to make their character special by making them leaders or medicine cats instead of using the actual character details to make it special.

Quote- "It's not what they want to see, it's what they see." 

I feel like this quote could be improved, maybe adding a bit more to it so it makes more sense?

Eye colour- light amber

Lots of people use blue or purple or whatever, so I always like seeing actual common colors!

Pelt colour- black with white paws, ears, and tail tip

This is a pattern that could actually happen!

Markings- white tribal art under eyes

This isn't technically possible for a pattern, but it would look cool so I give you a pass!

Scars- straight horizontal scar across bridge of nose and left ear tip is missing

Taking note that that would mean that she only really gets hit on the face?

Body type- muscular

This would make sense for a ShadowClan cat.

Personality- dark soul, misunderstood, mostly considered the bad guy, finds beauty in dark spaces, first one in, last one out when it comes to fights

This sounds pretty well balanced, but what is she misunderstood about?

Likes- shrew, mouse, rabbit, battle training, the dark

Again, well rounded.

Dislikes- modesty, ThunderClan/FrostClan, sass unless it's her own, birds, vole

I approve of these, A+!

Parents- Greydapple and Blackdusk

Again, these names would fit for ShadowClan, but usually a name that talks about a thing, (ex. Blackdust or Twistedbranch) rather then a feature (ex. Graydapple or Shrewfoot) isn't allowed in the rules of Warrior cat naming, although there are some exceptions.

Siblings- Sunblossom (sister) and Brackenfall (brother)Sunblossom is a nice name, but it doesn't really fit as a ShadowClan name. And again there is the problem that Brackenfall and Sunblossom don't really explain how the cats look, which is the most important thing for most Warrior cat names. I do approve of the number of siblings though.
Mate- WAS Thistlesplash, now none

Thistlesplash is yet ANOTHER example of an un-canon name.

Kits- Lilystar (Lilydusk), Taloncloud, Whispersong

Having a kit become leader is much better then her becoming leader, but YET AGAIN with the names! What do you imagine for the features and colors of a cat named Taloncloud? It just doesn't make sense!

Mentor- Tigerblaze

*quietly shakes head* The name... the name...

Apprentices- none

N/A

Friends- Sunblossom, Brackenfall

I personally think that every cat that people design should have a friend other then their mentor, siblings or apprentice.

Enemies- Lightstream

I still don't approve of the name, but okay.

Best Skill- Fighting

N/A

Other skills- Sneaky!

N/A

Powers- none

N/A

Weaknesses- someone after her family, or attacking her soft spot (emotionally)

Okay.

Leadership 2.9/10Agility 10/10Stamina 7/10Speed- 9.999/10Stealth- is 100/10 an option?Strength- 10/10Defense- 10/10

I like the fact that leadership is so low, but maybe since the almost all of the rest of them are 10/10, then maybe balance some out with a lower agility or speed? Or stamina.

Fighting style- night ambush and double back

That's a style that fits with ShadowClan, I approve!

Other features- none really, just a broken past

Okay.

History/back story- As a kit, she was shut out at five moons, because Sunblossom was prettier, Greydapple was picky about looks, so she went to tigerblaze to raise her. Tigerblaze volunteered to mentor her, to train her to lead Shadow/LeafClan. But a visit from Mapleshade changed that very quickly, she told Darkpaw to seize everything. After murdering Marshpaw of Thunder/FrostClan, everything went wrong. At her warrior ceremony she was confronted about it. In confusion, she wailed that she did it on purpose. This upset Willowstar greatly, so she named Darkpaw Darkheart. When Darkheart's grandmother, Dustberry stepped up as leader, she changed Darkheart's name to Darkrose, in honour of her soft spot for Duststar. Darkrose fought with endlessly and murdered Lightstream, Marshpaw's sister. Thus, Mapleshade was proud of the monster she created, and tried to push it further. But meeting Thistlesplash changed that. Taking a little break to let Darkrose get comfy with her new life, then told Lightstream and Marshpaw's brother, Beebelly to rip Thistlesplash's guts out right in front of the queen who was expecting three kits. Horrified, she raised the kits alone and told them that their father was captured by Twolegs. She arranged with the Clan that they would fake that Hawktooth was their father once the kits were old enough to believe, and died keeping that secret. Hawktooth was happy to keep her secret, as was the rest of the Clan.

I approve of this backstory. She is almost as far away from a Mary-Sue as possible, and yet isn't boring! She had plenty of problems in life, lots of sadness, fear, and regret, but it all ended happily, leaving the reader satisfied in the conclusion. I think that I would read this in book form, and urge you to flesh it out completely if you haven't already!

Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5!

I think that with a few name changes, (or if you want to ignore the official naming rules then that's fine too XD ) then this would be an almost perfect character! She's very well-rounded, but has a satisfying ending anyway.

Thank you for reading!