[On Hold] Book Reviews ➳ By Sasha

Enchants (Wild Ones # 1)

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Title: Enchants(Wild Ones # 1)
Genre: Fantasy & Adventure (Mild Romance)

Cover: The cover is a picture of Aria standing under an arch in an outdoors area. It fits perfectly with the description of Aria and the setting she's in. The font made the cover stand out, the cursive makes it seem more magical. 10/10

Title: The title is kind of long and Wild Ones #1 is unnecessary. Most writers would put book 1 in the description, but in your case it's Wild Ones #1. If you got rid of it and left the title as Enchants then the title wouldn't be original or creative at all so I guess its fine how it is. Though, I understand why you chose the title it Enchants, it makes perfect sense. The animals are the four main protagonists' enchants and they are very valuable to the book. 7/10

Summary (Description/Blurb): The summary was very detailed and did not give away too much information but intrigues the reader. I did not catch any mistakes, Great job!
10/10

Chapter 1: The chapter is really, I mean REALLY, long. This is probably the longest chapter I have ever read on wattpad. You started off very bold and strong, Aria is out hunting for food, killing animals to survive. I was pretty surprised when you said she hunted bears that are about twice the size of her, impressive. However, I struggling to read paragraph after paragraph because its so freakin long. I skipped about 5 paragraphs out of boredom and read only the good parts. There wasn't any actual dialogue (other than the flashback of Aria talking to her mother) and it was hard to stay focused, but you did a nice job on imagery. You have such a way with words, the way you describe things is beautiful, everything is very detailed, and I can picture the scenes in my head. I noticed that your sentences are a bit wordy, like some your sentences are complex and would be better off simpler. 7/10

Chapter 2: This chapter was a lot better than the first. There was so much going on, the lion killing bandits, people wanting to kill Aria and Aria leaving for good. I could feel the tension between the people, how they all wanted to kill her because Harris had killed the bandits, and then Cook pointed out that she was a hunter and if they killed her in the middle of the war, they would all likely die. The conversations between Harris and Aria made me laugh a little, nice job on humor! I loved the cliffhanger, it made me want to continue reading and find out what happens to Aria. 9/10

Chapter 3: You changed POV to Qas and left me wondering what's going to happen to Aria, but its okay, because again, you started off with the interesting stuff and that kept me reading. I could feel the hate between Qas and his father, the king, and I felt so bad for Jedda. You never said how old Jedda was, but guessing from how you described her, "there were lines on her face which shouldn't be," she has to be at least in her 30s or maybe even older. Everything was well paced and contributes to the plot. 9/10

Chapter 4: Again, nice imagery. I love that the setting is right next to a horrific place in war. Or should I say "a pleasant city, and an absolute hell, side by side."
10/10

Chapter 5: Not much really happened, there was a meeting and afterwards the third protagonist met the Enchant and they had a small conversation. 7/10

Grammer/Spelling: I didn't catch any spelling mistakes while I was reading, but I think some light editing and proof reading would be great. 9/10

Characters: All of the characters are unique except the King. I've read many books and the king is usually the bad guy. I don't really know much about the him, other than what I've read in the first five chapters. So far he's very cliché, wants to have more power, unite with other kingdoms etc. Try adding a bit more of a background for him. 7.5/10

Plot: The plot is very original and creative, very different from other fantasy books I've read. I'm not going to go into too much detail about it, so I'm going to give it 8.5/10.

Total: 94/110

I would recommend this to a friend who loves fiction.

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