Story Title: He's Just My Mission
Author: Miss__moon07
Reviewed by: Fantastic_Me07
I just finished reading your story hanggang chapter 3 entitled "He's Just My Mission". And ito po ang reviews ko:
1.) Intro--that's a very good start like binigay mo 'yung flow ng kwento and also the questions that urges a reader to click the next chapter. And okay naman ang grammars may konting errors lang sa past and present tense, and no need na din po for paraphrasing.
2.) Point of View Chap1- Naguluhan lang po ako ng slight sa Flashback scene dahil naging third POV pala siya. And another thing pala po, yung sa mga 'dots' po. Sometimes merong dalawa o apat. Okay lang naman if ellipsis[...] kasi normal lang naman 'yun minsan. And I think errors lang naman yun siguro sa typing. Ang pagdala mo sa flow ng kwento at paggamit ng mga salita ay parang hindi halata na first time niyo po magsulat. I know you're good at it already kaya siguradong kakayanin mong maging successful author someday. And I like how you play the event, as a reader, hindi ko in-expect na agent siya, I thought she was a mafia. As in ang ganda po, but I think if you can add some hint sa previous chapter, mas madagdagan yung excitement and maku-curious kami lalo. And I think alam niyo naman po ito pero sasabihin ko parin po hahaha. May nagturo po kasi sakin about sa character build-up like sabi niya dapat daw consistent yung character sa POV niya kahit na nagpapanggap lang siya.
Yun lang naman po. Hihi. Sana po huwag kayong magalit sa'kin.❤️ You really have a great potential! ❤️ Fighting! Love, love, love!❤️
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