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Monologue (plz read)

So. Hi. So I case u didn't know I'm competing in the regional drama competition for my school. I am doing a makeup design and an original dramatic monologue.

Here's my problem. In my drama class  they have been really focusing and helping with my acting, but no one has been helping me improve my writing. So I came here.

This is my monologue:

"Can I talk to you about something? Listen, I'm a mess, a huge mess… I-I can't really… control my thoughts. Let me explain, there is like this… voice in my head. It whispers things…(small laugh) well sometimes it whispers. Sometimes it yells, and it's so loud… on a good day it will just whisper little things like "That was a stupid move" of "you made that really awkward". But on a bad day, it will yell- scream things into my ear "That was stupid, you're stupid, they hate you, everyone hates you, you're not enough, you don't matter" and it's so loud. Its all I can hear. It's like I'm drowning and no one can hear me screaming, and even if they did, I wouldn't be able to hear them because all I can hear is that voice screaming that I deserve this!

(Breaks down)

Sometimes it's too much, the voice is to loud. Sometimes I can't take it anymore, because when all you can hear is a voice telling you that you don't matter, you believe it. You wanna give up. You wonder if anyone would care if you just. (Beat).. But I don't want to do that. I can't give up. The voice isn't going to go away, I know that. But maybe we can get it to quiet down? I can't do it alone.. and I guess that's why I'm here.I thought maybe if I told people what was happening inside my head, they would be able to help me. Maybe you could yell over the voice and maybe it would quiet down. Maybe you don't care, but you're my brother, I love you. And if you do care… could you maybe help the mess that I am..."

Plz give me feedback, is there anything I should change? I'd appreciate it.

Also dont steal this I wrote it

Bye