Stone Throne (beta)

Feedback

Hey, if you have read this far that is amazing! I am so glad that you chose to read my story and actually finished it. That is a dream come true for me. You are amazing. I really love this story (and i hope that you did too) I want to improve it and make it the best that it can be, but I need help to do that. 

If you want to (totally no pressure) you could answer some of the questions below or provide me with feedback of any kind. Just message me on here or email me if you want to help out. If you don't want to give me any feed back that is okay, your still amazing and I appreciate your support so much. Thank you!

- Love James  

These are some suggestions of the kind of feed back I need. This work sheet is not mine I got it at casblomberg.com

https://casblomberg.files.wordpress.com/2015/01/betareadingworksheet.pdf  

All credit for it goes to the owner of that site and creator of content. Not me.

Beta-Reading Worksheet Book Title: ___________________________ Author: ___________________________ Date: ___________________________ Beta Reader: ___________________________

Please find below my initial thoughts and opinions on this story. Every comment is my own personal opinion and provided for the author's consideration only. Story • Within the first few pages, were you compelled to continue reading?

• Within the first few pages, were questions raised you needed the answers to? Was a sense of mystery created? Did you want to know more?

• What was the main thing that captured your attention within the first chapter? Was it a character? An event? A mystery?

• Within the story, did you encounter large information dumps? Large sections of backstory? Or did the author reveal information in a non-obtrusive way?

• Did you feel pieces of the story were missing?

• Did you feel the narrator told you events, thoughts, or other information or showed you the action as it unfolded?

• Did the narrator reveal too much information, or provide too much leading?

• Did you feel characters disappeared without any resolution?

• Did you notice any major errors in the story? Events that somehow turned into different events? Or characters who turned into different characters?

• Were you pulled out of the story often? Any particular areas?

• Did you want to put the book down? When and why?

• Did you skip any sections? When and why?

• Which parts of the story were so exciting you couldn't put the book down?

• What did you think of the pacing?

• Did the story have a convenient solution, what we call a deus ex machina? At some point, did some character or thing magically appear out of nowhere and tidy up all the loose ends? Sir Noble conveniently showed up to turn the tide of the battle when he hasn't been mentioned anywhere else?

• Did the story use a technique that's too convenient – ie, magically solving problems in a dream world without restrictions? Everyone uses any type of magic available to get out of every situation, without repercussions or restrictions?