[ROUND 3 CLOSED]
The perfect place to get constructive feedback on your books when you need it, or even a nice ego boost! Everyone is welcome. I really hope you enjoy!
☁first impressions (24.5/25): I love everything about the cover. It's attractive, it's bright, thus eye-catching (which you don't see done WELL a lot on Wattpad) and it's just overall very aesthetically pleasing. I started reviewing this book about 2 days ago but unfortunately got sidetracked, and I was going to give you a lower score for the previous cover you had, but I'm glad you changed it. The only thing I would change about this one is maybe make your text brighter so we can see the title and username better. The title is very original, and it's also great that you're one of the first people that I see when I search "Summit" on wattpad. The description is absolutely adorable, and so eye-catching. It gets the book's plot across without giving too much away, and the quote is super engaging, too. I wouldn't change a comma!
☁grammar & sentence structure (10/15): Your grammar is pretty spot on throughout the book, save for the few places with periods/commas misused, things like that. I always suggest a light copy edit of books, so I'll suggest that for you, as well. One thing I noticed was the overuse of dialogue tags. It's a very common mistake, but something that is crucial for the enjoyability of a book. Things like "grumbled" and "whined" after a piece of dialogue, while intriguing the audience, can also clutter the text. The word "said" or "asked" melts in a reader's head. It's skipped over, and that could be a good thing for pieces of dialogue that you don't really want to stand out as much as another. I would use those flashy dialogue tags for things you really want to make stand out in your text. Also, I suggest more complex sentences. Patchwork a few of your simple sentences together to create 1-2 more elaborate sentences. This obviously doesn't go for every single sentence, because the text would get boring to read if you did that, but it's nice to see more complex sentences once in a while.
☁plot (25/30): I've definitely seen the storyline before with the reluctant tutor/nerd falling in love with the bad boy. However, I think the characterization of everyone and the writing style made up for it. It's always cool to see how an author makes a classic storyline their own, and I think you did that pretty well. I would just add some more unique plot points in the future so that it can stand out from the crowd. With 13 chapters, it's really just the start of the book, especially with your chapter lengths, but I think you should start branching out subplots at this point to make it more unique, and I would have suggested to do this actually BEFORE 13 chapters, but this is totally fine!
☁characters (17/20): They were all so interesting, especially taekook! I love the tsundere archetypes in books, and you really pulled it off perfectly with Taehyung, as well as the persistent bad boy in Jungkook. Though a little cliche as they've been done before, they still add a flare to the book that I'm in love with. I can already tell Taehyung will slowly begin coming around while Jungkook finds things to actually like about him... THE PERFECT K DRAMA! Somi, Mercedes, and the rest of BTS were decent supporting characters, as well. One thing I would like to point out is that Taehyung might be mean just for the sake of being mean. So far, I don't really see why he has justification for his anger directed toward Jungkook, either. I would either soften this side of him or create a reason as to why he acts like this, other than the fact that Jungkook is perceived as a brat.
☁writing style (18/20): I think it's a contemporary style that a lot of people do, and it's super cute! I like how we can hear Jungkook's thoughts vs. hearing everyone's thoughts all the time or none at all. I think it definitely adds to the overall feel of the story. Since you have the inner feeling stuff down pat, I think you could just add more sensory detail to the text to really round it out. Even little things like how the wind feels against Taehyung's neck or what a room looks like with the sun shining through can add such depth to a story that can't be achieved otherwise.
☁flow (9/10): It was pretty even the whole way through. I think one thing that adds to the flow of a book is the sentence lengths and choppiness of them, which I already touched on before, so I won't say it again. The chapter lengths were very good. I didn't feel too rushed with each chapter I read, nor felt bored reading a scene, which was awesome! You kept the reader captivated with transitions that were smooth, WHICH IS SUPER HARD TO DO, BTW! So kudos to you!
☁total score: 103.5/120 or 86.3%!
Cool beans!
☁optional advice nook: Make the font for the cover brighter so we can see it. I strongly recommend this: utilize "said" a lot more in your dialogue, like, WAY more. Work on character development and think of reasons as to why they behave the way they do. Add more surrounding details to let the reader know what's happening around the characters better. Maybe add 1-2 B plots alongside the main romance so that it can really stand out! Add more sensory details to the text so we can see what the characters see more clearly.
☁song nook: Here are some songs I thought of while reading this! I was thinking of a lot of songs with cute, bubbly beats, and maybe from the POV of someone who either wants someone to give them a chance/being propositioned by someone for love. Let me know what you think about these!
♔Cat & Dog by TXT♔ (Jungkook chasing Taehyung around like a dog... ya know.)
♔Just Right by GOT7♔
♔DARLING by TAEYANG♔
♔Physical by Dua Lipa♔
☁summary: This was such a cute read! Like, seriously. I just couldn't stop reading once I started, and for good reason, too. I think you have so much potential to really be an amazing writer. (and you already are!) Just polish up on the things I gave you advice about, and going from there, you should be Gucci!
Aaaand... that's it for the review! Comments, questions, concerns, please let me know. 2 more books until the next round! I'm SO excited for the new submissions!
