Book Reviews

13. Sincerely, Charli Day

Review done by Jasmine & Ash

Title: Sincerely, Charli Day

Author: universal_boredom

Review done by Ash

🔴 Writing Style

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🔴 Grammar and Punctuation

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🔴 Dialogue

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🔴 Cover

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ = 0.8

🔴 Summary

⭐️⭐⭐⭐= 0.8

Ash's Total = 4.2

Writing style: Your writing is awesome! You have a great flow and use for words, it's all so relatable. There was the odd line that didn't write make sense or was too long without any punctuation. I think this was more of a style issue than a puncuatation issue though.

Grammar: I didn't notice any grammar issues, the only thing I could really say about this connects with what I said in the Writing style section. Other than that, I didn't notice any huge errors!

Dialogue: it's all well written and really realistic.the only thing I would point out is to watch the lack of use around things like "She said" ... it cane become more consuming as the dialogue grows or if more than two people are involved. I wish there was more dialogue, it seems like there isn't much. Only two-four lines and then right back into the description. There was more dialogue in the second half of chapter two, but it also increases more in the third chapter as well.

Cover: I like the cover, I am not sure what it is bit I do think it's really nice. I do wish the title stood out a bit more. I do know this is something I like more for my covers though, maybe you don't mind it? It's hard to read the title though until click on it, or read the title beside it.

Summary - The summary is amazing. I think you should remove the the thing about her mother though. You're summary almost gives too much away. I would also write out the letter 3. Any numbers under 10 should be written out :)

Overall - I am really excited I got to read your book. I didn't leave many comments, but I gave likes to all the chapters I read. I mainly didn't comment because I didn't find many issues that was worth pointing it.

Review done by Jasmine

🔴 Writing Style

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐= 1.00

🔴 Grammar and Punctuation

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ = 0.80

🔴 Dialogue

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐⭐ = 1.00

🔴 Cover

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 0.80

🔴 Summary

⭐️⭐⭐⭐⭐= 1.00

Jasmine's Total = 4.6

Writing style: strong beginning, you seemed to have captured your own unique writing style, congrats. The structure of your story is really sturdy and very well done, the flow is one point, I'll only say this, you lacked just a little when it comes to telling us where exactly the characters are all the time. There were two times I was caught off guard because I didn't see the transition of Charli and Haisley reaching the cafeteria for break and also when she left school and was heading to her car. But otherwise it was all very well done.

Grammar & Punctuation: there were very little errors in both Grammar and Punctuation and only I think two errors, one in spelling and another in in paragraph where two words were doubled. A simple mistake, nothing a quick edit couldn't fix.

Dialogue: lively, witty, realistic and truly funny, I had a joy reading them speaks and the readers loved the amazing one liners or funny exchange between characters. Great job.

Cover: the cover looks almost nostalgic, as if it's like an old Polaroid picture from the past. To me, it looks lovely and has this simplistic feeling which sets a little bit of the tone to the story. The title is clear and the font is okay, but the white lettering almost gets a little lost within the image since it is already a lightened image. Good cover, just minor improvements and it would be perfection.

Summary: oh, all the possibilities for a teenager who is just trying to survive high school with the best experience. Charli wishes to love life as normal as she can, but with a sick mother, she is deprived from it. The summary is quite well written, giving just enough information to tease the readers fancy and make them bit their lip with want, especially at the teaser of certain unbearable young man to ignite Charli's anger, adding to her already full plate. It's really good, and gives enough insight into what the reader should expect, at least from the surface.

Jasmine's overall notes: the story is a great read and it truly captures the audience.  I truly hope that you'll continue to be this successful in the future in your writing. I think you already know what's wrong (not much to be honest) and that you need to just carefully edit your story and it'll be quite alright.

Overall Rating __+4.6 = __/10