CRITIC ALLY: A Critique Agent [OPEN]

STILL WATER by AleliRescobel

AleliRescobel:

OVER-ALL, this is a must-read story. Gustong-gusto ko yung main idea at pagka-unique niya.💕 Hahahaha! Hindi pa ako tapos magbasa! Wait mo lang ang votes, at rating ko para sa'yo- I'll dm it.

Geez. Feeling ko papaiyakin ako nina Leana at Danilo.

Keep on writing! Tuloy-tuloy lang sa passion mo. I believe in you.❤️

I. Book Cover, Title and Story Description

If I would randomly choose a story to read at nakita ko yung book cover and title mo, sorry to say, I'll SKIP IT.

First wala siyang impact kasi nagtatalo yung concept ng title at book cover mo.

Ang title mo ay "Still Water", na nagpa-confuse sa'kin sa una. I don't know if it's metaphorical or what, at kung metaphorical man 'to then... it can be better. You used the words "still" (a vague word) and "water" (also too weak). If you'll change it after this, I suggest na baguhin mo yung "water" at optional naman yung "still". The water can be improved to something SYMBOLICAL of it. For example, bodies of water like lake, sea, ocean, etc. I don't know. It's up to you. Still is an adjective, and as I've searched for its synonyms, may mga pwedeng ipalit sa kaniya.

Here comes the book cover naman. Kahit 'wag mo na ibahin yung title, i-improve mo na lang cover. I see that you tried to put a connection between the cover and your title. Pero hindi naman fonts lang ang nasa cover na dapat naka-relate sa title. There are other elements, like the background photo. I must say, wala silang chemistry ni title. Where's the water? Where's the STILL water?

Another advice is to AVOID putting things na hindi masyadong kita o readable, kasi mas dagdag pampagulo lang sila. Mayroon kasing quote sa ibaba, nahirapan akong basahin kasi the color, the thickness and its position kung saan puro bulaklak yung nasa likod. Mahirap basahin, malabo pa naman mata ko! Hahahaha! But in fairness, worth it yung pagngungudngod ko ng mukha sa cellphone! The quote is pretty good! It touch a part of my heart. Really.

I made an example nga pala of a minute-made book cover para maging guide mo. Tinry ko na rin yung napili kong pwedeng ipalit sa water.