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Escape - Neke15

(Note- this is a requested review, please see Authors note at end of chapter if you want me to review your story. Authors may request more than 1 story of theirs for reviewal.)

Author- Neke15

Chapters- 6 as of 1/13/15 (almost wrote 2014 :P ) author updates every week, just to let you know.

Summary- (forgive me if my summary of the plot really sucks, I can't copy + paste yours which really sucks because I'll have to write it out... But, whatever. I'll try. Lol.
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so basically a girl named Abby, is kidnapped and left on an island where she discovers... DUN DUN DUN Luke's body. Dead. YeaH? No? Yeah. But don't worry, guys! He might just not be dead ;) no it's not paranormal but that'd be super cool! XD okay, moving on...

Tips for 'improvement'- Personally, I know it can get EXTREMELY annoying for another author to tell you right from wrong, please keep in mind all who are reading this I am not trying to be rude with anything I may say or do in my reviews.

I'm only trying to help the author improve, and that is all. So, my tips would be to plan your story. Your plot, characters, everything.

One of the biggest mistakes you can make in writing is not having any idea where you are taking your story, and ignoring the fact you need to know your character as if they are your own best friend. Know their personality, what they like, what makes them different from you.

How is your character going to react to a certain situation? This is important to keep in mind if for example, your character is extremely shy or introverted, and they are greeted by the so called 'bad boy' of the school.

Will he/she snap at the bad boy or back down and shy away? So those are my common and most important tips. Now, Neke15, your story has good grammar and spelling, it wasn't hard to read or comprehend and your very creative. These are all great aspects of a writer and I also want to add the fact that I really like the length of your chapters. Not to lengthy nor to short.
Keep up the work.

My overall review:
Now time for the most dreaded part, I hate criticizing stories. HATE IT. Thankfully, your story wasn't terrible otherwise I would feel terrible for either sugar coating it, or making you feel like a bad writer.

1. The first thing I want to note on is the pace. It moves a bit fast, not too fast but slowing it down a little so the reader can have a better experience with the story and detailing the setting a bit more is always a good idea. If you don't want to do this and it's just not your writing style, you don't have to. You don't, just keep in mind this is another authors opinion and you really don't need to listen to me if you disagree. Just have fun! :D

2. Next up is what I mentioned earlier, character development. Since this is a fan fiction, it might be kind of hard to give a personality to these characters whom you want to be just like the real celeb(s) you watch on the big screen or at a concert. The cold truth is, you don't really know them personally, (at least I'm assuming you don't, although I could be wrong :P lol) so you'll just have to give them their own personality, make them appear real to the reader. I used to struggle with not having any connection to my characters, and that made it harder on me to continue with my stories. If you have this issue at all, take a seat, make some hot chocolate, and make a list of cool personality traits that describe your character.

3. Setting and plot - So far, your creativity really helps to develop Your plot and make it unique. I loved how your characters had a strong connection with their fans, and how in return the fans had a strong admiration towards their idols. However, the setting was not described in very much detail which could be critical under certain circumstances, although your story was a fast paced and detailed plot filled book which definitely makes up for it! 😀

So after reading, I definitely do recommend this story to any 1D, or 5sos fans out there! Please, please go read. The author is soooo sweet and replies to any comments on the story, Neke15 also seems to really care about the readers and I feel that's important, I feel the author deserves much more attention on the story, and you should definitely help out and go check it out! ;) so that's all, if you have any more questions about Escape and the review, please message me or comment. If you feel anything in here was offensive in any way or should be removed from the review all together, let me know.

Till next time! - Allie
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A/N: Okay so just to let you guys know I will be accepting requests for a review on your story, starting now. So please either message me, or just comment if you want me to review your story. This story was actually requested on the last chapter and I think it's a great idea for me to help beginning authors on wattpad to try and get their stories some more reads. Just FYI I will continue with reviews AND normal recommendations so it won't be complete reviews from here on... So, sorry for the loooong A/N I will make these shorter in the future
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