⌦𝗕𝗘 𝗬𝗢𝗨𝗥𝗦𝗘𝗟𝗙 𝗔𝗪𝗔𝗥𝗗𝗦 [CLOSED] 2020

SHIPS PARTICIPANTS REVIEWS!

HR MEANS HOST REVIEW.

* MEANS REVISED.

judge angybear

ehtNanatea Royal Conflicts, Story still ongoing

 Rules: 5ptInteraction: 2ptCover: 4ptDescription: 4ptTitle: 4ptSocial Msg: 3ptPlot: 8ptGrammar: 12ptPlot Twist: 7ptDevelopment: 9ptCreativity: 7ptOpinion: 8pt 

REVIEW:  I'm actually really looking forward to this being finished, I want to see how it ends. Needs basic editing and proofing though nothing major.Overall 73/100

HR: The book seems interesting when i had a random look through, i hope it breaks the small barriers it has to get a win.

kookie_83 The Unexpected Soul 

Story still ongoing.

 Rules: 5ptInteraction: 1ptCover: 4ptDescription: 3ptTitle: 5ptSocial Msg: 2ptPlot: 8ptGrammar: 5ptPlot twist: 5ptDevelopment: 6ptCreativity: 5ptOpinion: 4pt

 REVIEW:It had a good concept. Needs MAJOR editing and proofing but it certainly has potential. I had to force myself to finish reading this one.Score: 53/100

HOST REVIEW: Hello there dear! I had a quick check on your book, and your cover looks great, it did attract me but i suggest you to proof read the chapters, also, you could try to write in author's POV, instead of * you can rather explain the situation in a second person POV, it'd be great if you use "annotations" instead of dialogue: 

scarlet_heather My love for you is forever. Story is ongoing.

Rules: 5ptInteraction: 5ptCover: 5ptDescription: 3ptTitle: 5ptSocial Msg: 3ptPlot: 6ptGrammar: 10ptPlot Twist: 4ptDevelopment: 7ptCreativity: 6ptOpinion: 6pt 

review: It has a fantastic character description page. The multiple author opinions during the body of the story is distracting. Author also flops from one persons POV to another multiple times during a chapter and it gets confusing.Overall 65/100

HR: As the judge said, do work on the POV's, either keep a single characters POV throughout the chapter or keep the whole book/ max chapters in the main protagonists POV or the author POV. 

judge: Taenillakook

paradise by _sugarita

Rules 5reader interaction 5cover 5description 4title 5social message 2plot 5grammar vocabulary 10twist attraction 4emotions character 5creativity 4opinion 4mark 58

 review... it has lots of grammar mistakes..it would be better if author talk about emotions more..and explain their feelings

HR: Work on your vocabulary, it's good to have simple writing style but some flowery words would make it better. Also there are many random a/n's (author's notes) and they kind of keeps taking the readers off track.

royal affairs by btsluvfantasy

  Rules 5reader interaction 5cover 5description 4title 5social message 2plot 5grammar vocabulary 10twist attraction 4emotions character 5creativity 4opinion 4mark 58 *68 

 review... it has lots of grammar mistakes..it would be better if author talk about emotions more..and explain their feelings

HR: you could work a little on the dialogues...the sentences allignment...well it's rare...also, proper spacing between the lines would make it better to read.