Imaginary world

This is my frist English assignment for this semester, write a short story in 200 words, the one below is 235 words but more 35 isn't a big difference right? =D
It's been a long time since I wrote anything literary in Arabic, and this is my first time writing any thing literary in English. Just wanted to clear this out before I say all criticism and judgment is acceptable. Can't wait to hear your opinions.