Rules of the World

When faced with challenges often time we struggle to see any good in the chaos. Though there are often very valuable life values that are always taught to a deeper meaning through the challenges that one endures.
Wrote this for an English class trying to get some constructive criticism to improve it. I know that my transition are awful but trying to make sure that it makes sense to someone who hasn't read the book Voice from the Rust Belt before. Thank you!!