RebeccaStories97
I kind of want to change the plot for die with a smile abit
Like making the male oc either Tim’s brother or Angela’s
-toshiba-
@RebeccaStories97 Hey I noticed you reuploades the fic I noticed some of the changes you made but there’s still the other areas that haven’t been fixed that the ai messed up
-toshiba-
@RebeccaStories97 Take out the chunk of a Robinavitch standard as well as rewritting the section because the ai messed it up with the wasteland stuff. Take out the entire "Dr. R shield" bit. Rewrite the Langdon area. Mckay is in her 40s way older than Roman so her area needs to be rewritten as well. The last bit about whittaker being the "future of the department" can just be taken out as well. The Jake area needs to be rewritten as well, he is not a doctor in the ER. The Collins section also needs to be rewritten I dont think it was ever stated in the show about her coming from a wealthy family, the ending section as well needs to be rewritten. Besides that there's moments in here where the characters are being referred to by first name I would swap that out and have them being used by just their last name for the before you read chapter. Also in my opinion I think you should just use the ai for a rough outline of how you want to structure the before you read and then rewrite it in your own words, not trying to be an ass but ai does a terrible job with fanfics and writing things a problem it does often is over explain certain things as well as using the word "chaotic" alot.
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@RebeccaStories97 here's some of the errors it made. at the beginning where it is describing his physical attributes i don't think it needs to go into super heavy detail as it did, take out the area where it says "the malnourished enviornment of the pitt" take out the entire paragraph of his complection because the ai for some reason thinks the pitt is some post apocolyptic enviornment. and remove the paragraph after it as well. His ER outfit could Just be rewritten to say he has the regular black scubs with a long sleeve thermal underneath and it looks like another version of Robbies hoodie in the cover photo of the story as well, keep the bit about the watch and how it has been passed down from father to son you can take out the bit about the gloves. The diagnostic tools area I would say change the photo from just being Robby to being a picture of his mother and robby while she was still pregnant, Lower half doesn't need to be there same with the reflector headband. Removing Robby being called Michael and switching it back over to Robby. Rewriting the last bit in relationships for Robby "Since Roman's mother died during his birth, Robby threw himself into working nonstop as a way to cope with the death" Speaking of I think you should find a face claim and a name for the mom as well and include that in the before you read. Changing out the part of "He wears his father's style of uniform" because Robby doesn't wear a lab coat and tie I'd say if you want to keep the hoodie do it because Mckay and Javadi also have one so I don't think it is something only Robby does. If Roman is the same as Mohan then he wont be a "lead physcian" he would be a 3rd year resident like her in s1 that needs to be changed in the santos and javadi category. I think the mentorship think can just be deleted altogether.
