Hey! You asked for writing advice so here it is. First off, always use correct spelling and grammar if you can help it in stories. Stories with no editing drive me nuts
Take time to describe things vividly and paint a picture for the audience. Even if it's just saying 'whisper' instead of 'said' it still is much better.
Finally, make sure the story is somewhat realistic. Yes, meeting Harry styles then falling in love over Skype for instance isn't very realistic, but don't push by making a story like "I was raped and beat by the 9 fathers I had, then Liam Payne adopted me and even though 12 Niall, Harry, Zayn, and Louis little sister are in love with me!" just no.
Hope this helped somewhat!! Good luck with your stories!!