Dude, can I recommend you to have beta readers so that it would be better to read and have the characters act like the lore please? Cuz most of the time reading similar like this makes it sound cringe to me as an English reader yknow,
Hey, so I’ve been enjoying your HSR story, and for a while I’ve been wanting to do my own take on the HSR in HSR idea, but I wanted to make sure you were okay with that. If you’re not that’s fine, I just wanted to be sure. Have a good day.