Aymk308

Okay, was in an unforgivingly long hiatus from writing due to extreme uni work. Now that finals are over, let the writing commence!

DFlukes

Hiya! I saw your forum advert so... 
          
          Right, so basically, I'm experimenting with a thing with tenses in my story (link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/5042744-reidier )
          
          If you have time, is it okay if you read some of it? 6 chapters, I reckon. 
          
          I have been told that the tense switching between the PoVs is disorientating, so I'd like a few more opinions on that. So mainly PoV feedback and character voice. 
          
          I know it's a bit long, so I won't be offended if you decide not to read it. Most people have busier and more interesting lives than me, so....  Yeah. That's it. 
          
          I'll also be happy to check out your story if you'd like me to.

Aymk308

Hi there! Alright, I've already added your story in my reading list. I'll message you my detailed feedback chapter by chapter once I'm free. Your first chapter's really promising, so I don't mind reading it :) 
            
            The only way to solve your tense problems is just settling for either present or past. Usually doing past tense is much easier compared to present. Skimming through your story a lot of times could help you note the mistakes.
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