@ScarlettBlackDaisy Wow, I just finished reading "Warmth Within" and I'm quite impressed. This chapter had so much going on and you were able to get all of these things right. What can I say, the starting scene was so strong and intense, it takes us back into how messed up, how dangerous and how troublesome Xavier's life truly is. Xavier goes on to mock the leader to distract him from finding out Haley, this shows how far he can go to protect the ones he cares about. After Xavier gets beaten up, the way Haley empathizes with Xavier, the way she feels fear and pain, in turn, makes us empathize with them, which makes us feel more connected to the characters and the story. Xavier's harshness and anger towards Haley give the scene an inner conflict just after we had finished with an outer one which is just an astounding way to write a scene. Afterward, we get to see the development of his character as he apologizes to Haley, calls her by her name and lastly glancing back at her while leaving. Love the way you show the character development (｡♥‿♥｡)
