It's really good! I like how you use a mix of mystery and romance to keep the storyline going. It's clever. Also your structuring is different fro others but you might want to check out Chap 1. it ws very hard to read, soething was wron with it.
But you should watch out fot punctul and grammatical mistakes as you have quite a few. Apart from that it really good!
Would you mind reading my story thanks!
P.S Do keep your story going, it has major potential.