Crizha Jehn Gregorio

I write Bls and I'm just a beginner so I would be really grateful if you could review and give feedback on my work.
          
          Sorry for being a bother. (//^∇^)/
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/378474791?utm_source=android&utm_medium=whatsapp&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=theApocalypse369

Hi