Hi, Lee,
I tried to go to your new story site (the lantern one) but it said it can't find the page. Did you withdraw it?
Are you planning on posting it on CC? If so, I'll wait till you do, so that I can give you more solid feedback.
By the way, I've sent you an invitation to Y/M story. Also, my chapter is up on public queue. You've read this one already, so you don't have to read it again, but there is another one coming up this coming Wednesday. Not sure if you've read that one. if you haven't I invite you to read it. It'll be on public queue also. Then after that, you can start the chapters on Private Queue.
It's already the end of the week! I wish you a very happy weekend!
Pappi