Crystalline0212

Hello, can you read it and give me your opinion? 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/403941798?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=Cassandramimi

FB fanfic
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/347244680?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Author_lagibosan&wp_originator=oQT%2BR1qz6ct4X9vtWKvs%2FKjVDZEe52EfvFHmjhxK6UVhG4AO3qDpEmat%2FMw4uLjtjEA2117LWjM6dA%2FblQo1%2BS4nj8mWb8Ux2W9FVOcqmNJc8hy52BKf%2FBT0yWLibzMv