Hey love,
I just finished reading your story, and I have to say it has SO much potential. You’ve created an engaging world and characters that really stand out. With a bit of fine-tuning (i.e. cleaning up the content, sharpening the storyline, smoothing out the time jumps and POV switches, and polishing the grammar) it’s going to shine even brighter.
I’m genuinely excited to see how you develop it further. I know it’s going to turn into something amazing, and I can’t wait to read what’s next!
Keep going, you’ve got something special here! Maybe we can do collab someday!
Zaniayah ❤️