Dead_Man_Shoto16

I published my book! It's called Betrayal Series, and I'd love some feedback!

Dead_Man_Shoto16

So a friend on here wants me to publish a book I've been writing irl... Should I? 

DemonBakuhoe

@Dead_Man_Shoto16 I'm too tired to read it all, but I read the first page, and it's really good so far!
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Dead_Man_Shoto16

@GenderfluidBakuhoe
            
            I published my book! Please give me feedback!
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-slxttyquinn

denki was naturally a feared dauntless leader . 
          no one knew his actual name he always went 
          by ' four ' . he was flirty at random times when 
          training people . 
          
          his eyes were cold and emotionless . he had 
          multiple cuts and bruises all over him . he 
          had quite a number of piercings including 
          snake bites , a septum piercing , cheek 
          piercings , tongue piercings and an eyebrow 
          piercing . he worked at the small tattoo shop
          they had at the pit .
          
          everyone knew not to pick a fight with ' four ' .
          he could easily murder anyone . he never told 
          anyone his name . he couldn ' t deal with one 
          person finding out . 
          
          his skin was a pale , almost gray , color . he was 
          quite a slut , but didn ' t show it . he normally 
          wore boots with heels to make him look taller 
          as he was 5 ' 2 " .
          
          his eyes had dark bags under as he sat 
          in the training room . he had been touched 
          in multiple ways when he didn ' t want it . 
          it was why he carried a switchblade with him 
          along with his tattoo pen .
          
          he got up and grabbed one of the knifes 
          on the table next to him and threw it 
          at the target . he heard someone come 
          in and looked over his shoulder ,
          
          ❝ whatcha doing here , stiff ? ❞
          
          he muttered quietly .

Dead_Man_Shoto16

(@-slxttydenki 
            I don't mind either way bro ^^))
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-slxttyquinn

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            • yeah , i get it , if you want 
            you could , or i can send
            it to you again if ya want •
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Dead_Man_Shoto16

@-slxttydenki 
            
            (0.0 damn, that's really good but I prefer doing rp in pms- I can drop my reply to this there if ya like-))
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