@DizzyInMyHead
It wasn't the story. It was the format, I suppose. Like maybe if you it separated line by line it'll be easier to read, and it'll build up suspense, as you read and the very last line "Then, he smile" will look very good at the end, standing on its own.
I wasn't thinking of belton nessisarily, and independence and kc arn't that far away
Belton is not a big city.
we only live like 20 mins away from a big city
I would
I wouldn't say we live in the middle of fricken nowhere
I wouldn't say we live in the middle of fricken nowhere