Fleet1284

STORY SPLASH IS BACK !!!!! YIPPEE !!!!!!
          	wasn’t expecting this lmao and I’m supposed to mention you so @JoelleSC :eyes:
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/386187566-golden-bubbles-contest

JoelleSC

@Fleet1284 Yess! Thank you! So sorry for the long wait omg
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CroodsGirl

Hey, how are you? This is Victoria from the Featured opportunity. While I thoroughly enjoyed reading your book, Admiring the Light, I have chosen not to Feature it right now. Some grammar issues need attention, and the flow is a little wonky at times, with sudden page breaks and not knowing how we got there without context clues. Your characters are very well-written; the flow and grammar are what need attention. The grammar can be fixed by visiting an editing shop on Wattpad (they're free). As for flow, I recommend dropping a few context clues beforehand. Feel free to re-submit! I would love to reread it once it's cleaned up a little!
          
          Thank you again!

Fleet1284

@CroodsGirl Oop? Interesting, yeah I’ll get back to you if I go back in and revise at some point  I can totally see the point you made about the flow being jank/wonky lol
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CroodsGirl

@Fleet1284 yes, it was—to keep in touch.
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Fleet1284

OHHHH THAT WAS YOU WHO FOLLOWED MY DEVIANTART
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CroodsGirl

Hello, this is Catherine Victoria Christie (@CroodsGirl) with the Featured opportunity. I want to thank you for trusting me with your book to review. Aside from what I pointed out in the form, is there anything in particular you would like me to focus on?
          
          Thank you again!

Fleet1284

@CroodsGirl not really, whatever you'd like 
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