I just read a reply that you had to a comment that said you were 12 years old when you wrote this story. Well let me start by saying WOW, NEVER would I have guessed that. I'm not a writer and no English major, I did however see some mistakes in the grammar, but nothing that a good editor couldn't repair. After saying that, I see that you say you aspire to become an English teacher one day, so I'm sure you will also make the best editor. This story was interesting, sweet, sometimes upsetting. It is an awesome story that you should be proud of, especially having been written at such a young age. I have read plenty of stories here on Wattpad, and there are a few that could not hold my interest at all and I only read the first chapter or two. People need to realize that this is a site filled with amateur writers sprinkled with a few seasoned and published ones. Keep writing, don't let this be your only work, I'm gonna follow you, and hope to read something else from you one day. Thanks again for His Betrayal.