BatataGOD
Hi, are you alive?
GgamezYtplayz
GanatraSurya
When will this continue
https://www.wattpad.com/story/212974373?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=GanatraSurya
GgamezYtplayz
Hallo ya'll just got back on Wattpad lol
BrianGeller
Still here
ElkayCruz
We are waiting for updates, dear writer.
It is time for you to come back.
Herrscher-of-Hentie
What is your other account?
bythearcana
Is bro even on this account anymore or is there a new one
gaimoo
Yo
GgamezYtplayz
I am covered in sweat and i have speedrun making some chapters
GgamezYtplayz
this message may be offensive
So if you are reading this then it means you have seen that I have dropped my book
Okay so for why:
As you can see that I have pulled almost all of my book and have remained some of the books here, NA is a fucked up power shitting Harem shitting fucked up in the ass booked, also I fucked up the plot on CHAPTER 2 FUCKING 22222222
what will happen now:
I will be dropping NA and will be revising or remaking Mine and Mine Alone, also Childhood Promise
what would happen to NA:
I am putting it for adoption so yeah
Now, I know that you all are very angry like "Fuck you , Bitch I waited for this"
I know I know you all hate me but, fuck that book, fuck that shitty ass writing
So I might not be back for like SO MANY MONTHS CAUSE OF FUCKING SCHOOL
update will be very rare but I promise ya'll I will update if I have time
Thank you for reading, Oui
KeyofInside
@HoangMinhNguyen215 I can gave you some nice tips when making a conversation between character better, when you make it be sure to read it out loud and think whether is it too forceful or is it natural enough, or is it somethings that this character will said so? "put on their shoes and walk for yourself" is the best way to make the conversation much natural considering the fact that they are adult now if we follow your timelines
KeyofInside
@GgamezYtplayz i want to give you idea for the the beginning of the story, instead of making the MC has to leave because of "angry because feeling offended" we should change the story line into like, the captain feel that they are right and feel a sad but not angry as well as leave them for thinking that he is not deserve to be with them, as well as training to become stronger, to be more "helpful" and the part of where Kiana, Mei, Bronya, Himeko and Theresa we can add more like "But don't get me wrong Well even though he is suck but he always there for us when we needed most but i just hope he can be more helpful" this will make their insult to captain will be less powerful but at least this will make the reader know that they are much more thoughtful, because remember most of them has already grown up so you have to create that they are much more thoughtful and mature, and not too narrow-minded, as well as giving them some credit, and the part where he stay with relt, i think we can have like 5 to 10 chapter of them spending time together and building their relationship, and the part that you said 5 years later, that is when i think you should build all character be more mature and independent as they are freaking adult now, their words and action much more thoughtful, your concept is really good but the way you building character is rather weak, it will be much more better if you spend more time with the character, you have to imagine you are walking their shoes to be able to know what will they act and talk.