GwendalynOng

   Hi to all my readers  
          	
          	  I have just re-edited the first chapter of “Helping Mr Mafia” and I want you guys to tell me what you think of the edited version. If people do like it I will continue with the editing style of it. 
          	   
          	    Please PM me if you have anything you want to say! I would like some constructive criticism so I could shape the story to its best yet. 

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LunaQueen87

Hi. I'm currently reading Helping Mr Mafia and whilst the plot is great, as am reading it, it seems a bit choppy meaning it goes from one thing to another thing totally unrelated. A good story needs to flow to grab the reader. You need to have someone to proofread what you have written as a fresh pair of eyes can see things you have missed. This story has so much potential. It just needs a final polish ☺

GwendalynOng

Hi, so so so sorry for the late reply.  Because of the many many many grammar mistakes and inconsistency of the chapters. I’m currently re editing the whole book chapter by chapter. So there will be a weird jump here and there. 
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Aquari0us13

Hi GwendalynOng..
           I am currently reading your book Helping Mr. Mafia... But from chap 7 it just changes completely... I guess some chapters are missing after chapter 6... I really loved the book, i would be really greatful if you check this issue..،✨

GwendalynOng

Hey I’m sooooo sorry for the super late reply. I’m currently editing the the whole book chapter by chapter. So there will be some inconsistencies. 
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GwendalynOng

   Hi to all my readers  
          
            I have just re-edited the first chapter of “Helping Mr Mafia” and I want you guys to tell me what you think of the edited version. If people do like it I will continue with the editing style of it. 
             
              Please PM me if you have anything you want to say! I would like some constructive criticism so I could shape the story to its best yet. 

clarissam1972

Hi Gwendalynong,
          Hope I don’t offend but I’m reading your book that’s underediting right now and it’s really good. But I wanted you to know that I read the summary of your other work regarding Diego R. There is one line in the summary that says -paraphrasing “he does not play around with girls”. Now I think I know what you meant, yet it sounds like he doesn’t deal with females. In context I’m sure you meant he likes women not little girls but it’s just worded like he doesn’t like women. Like I said I hope it doesn’t offend; I’m reading that story next. You are a really good writer for being 15. I have a daughter that just turned 16 and she couldn’t write her way out of a cardboard box. Keep writing young lady, you are doing a great job. 

GwendalynOng

Hi sorry but where did you find that mistake??? I’ll change it right away and thank you for spotting it and messaging me 
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