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I have begun writing a new book, It's called Hi, I'm Becky
          

Thanks for your feedback, I try to make my stories longer but I don't understand how I only have about 5 pages in my silver elephant story when I've wrote 17 chapters.
          
          In the story I'm currently writing I'm trying to make it longer and I'm trying to use better grammar. The story i am currently writing's called "A Tiger's Tale" it's based on a true story about a tiger that was named Broken Tail that got hit by a train. I'm hoping that it'll be longer and because I'm writing in first person I'm using more thoughts and feelings within the story. But I'm trying to think of a way I could use more dialogue and when to use it.
          
          And Thank you again, I do appreciate your feed back 'cause now I know what I need to improve and I'll try to improve my grammar as well and I'll try adding more detail.

Hey I really like the idea of your silver elephant story but i think you need to check some of your grammar. You should also think about adding some more detail to your stories and making them longer. Over all i really think you are doing very good for only being 11 years old.

Hi I've wrote a new book, it's a poetry book.