Johanna

@Darkness94 
          
          Whatever works for you ;) Try to put one event per chapter, and write as much as you feel you need to. Some of my chapters get real short and some get real long. I just write and stop when I'm finished

would it help if i did ome page per chapter? but the thing about that is that all the stuff is already written, i dont know to seperate. I had a hard time seperating Vlad's P.O.V. from the story itself

@Darkness94 I hope you found my private message helpful ;)

I understand what your saying about the story going too fast, but I dont know how to slow the story down, could you help me?

 Oops, you already read it xD

I've read read the preface for now, and it looks good. The only thing is the grammar ^.^ An editor would be very useful for you, as grammar is a pain in the ass, and I mess it up all the time too. Just try noticing where people put commas. Read it aloud, and where you need to take a breath, add one for sure, or else your readers will go crazy :) I'll leave comments though. Read my story too?