You could be an amazing writer! You already are you just need a bit more practice :3
One thing to keep in mind is to stay consistent, if you can, and I noticed at one point in your writing you wrote "*sighs*" instead of something like "She sighed."
It's you're writing, but using the *'s to explain an action is called action mode writing and is used for Rp's as far as I know. You can use it though! It's up to you :3
Thank you for telling me to read your stories! They're very good! Keep going! <3 Happy Valentines day!
