LoFiLiveWire

The Defective Succubus: Part 2 is up. Please give feedback on the prologue and let me know what you would like to see for it, and I'll do my best while I'm still Active Duty. I'll be out as soon as December 20th, so I can put more time & effort into it afterwards. Until then, I'd love to see how it goes after all this time without writing.

WriteFanFicsForPizza

@LoFiLiveWire It was a short, nice read, mainly because I'm excited it's finally back. There were a few typos and some of the conversations felt a little unnatural but the characters are still there. Somehow, after like 2 years, you still understand the characters really well, so here's a round of applause . Your writing style definitely changed after such a long time and that's something I instantly noticed from the first few paragraphs. You still have good vocabulary and you still have a knack for making long paragraphs interesting with said wordplay intertwined with exposition, but it's of course very rusty after such a long layoff. You'll get your skills back soon, it's just like getting back into a video game and trying to get your skills back. Also, why is it an entirely new story? I've never completed one of my stories, so is it like a "no turning back" thing when you complete a story?
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LoFiLiveWire

@deGen3r4te Thank you! I hope to bring a writing style you and everyone else can enjoy. So far, I plan on adding personal trauma as well and fictional trauma you might enjoy into the story. We'll see how it's recieved.
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Babydoomslayer1439

Hey, can I ask a question?

Babydoomslayer1439

I'll read the succubus story again when I have time. Maybe I can remember.
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LoFiLiveWire

The Defective Succubus: Part 2 is up. Please give feedback on the prologue and let me know what you would like to see for it, and I'll do my best while I'm still Active Duty. I'll be out as soon as December 20th, so I can put more time & effort into it afterwards. Until then, I'd love to see how it goes after all this time without writing.

WriteFanFicsForPizza

@LoFiLiveWire It was a short, nice read, mainly because I'm excited it's finally back. There were a few typos and some of the conversations felt a little unnatural but the characters are still there. Somehow, after like 2 years, you still understand the characters really well, so here's a round of applause . Your writing style definitely changed after such a long time and that's something I instantly noticed from the first few paragraphs. You still have good vocabulary and you still have a knack for making long paragraphs interesting with said wordplay intertwined with exposition, but it's of course very rusty after such a long layoff. You'll get your skills back soon, it's just like getting back into a video game and trying to get your skills back. Also, why is it an entirely new story? I've never completed one of my stories, so is it like a "no turning back" thing when you complete a story?
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LoFiLiveWire

@deGen3r4te Thank you! I hope to bring a writing style you and everyone else can enjoy. So far, I plan on adding personal trauma as well and fictional trauma you might enjoy into the story. We'll see how it's recieved.
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WriteFanFicsForPizza

If you go to Afghanistan, please, while on the ground bleeding out from a bullet wound, release an update to The Defective Succubus. I'll lick your toes at your funeral if you do

LoFiLiveWire

@WriteFanFicsForPizza Part 2 is up. Please give your criticism and let me know what you expect from the story from now on.
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LoFiLiveWire

@WriteFanFicsForPizza I'm gonna do my best to do a Defective Succubus: Part 2 after I get out. Just gotta get my civvie job going and get my own place to live first.
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WriteFanFicsForPizza

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@WriteFanFicsForPizza Oh, that's actually kinda a commendable reason. I assumed it was some Jeffrey Dahmer shit
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pacec425885

You should make a sequel to the defective succubus 

LoFiLiveWire

@pacec425885 As much as I would like to, the military has killed anything creative inside of me. I have 9 months left, and then I'll see if I can rebuild from the ground up.
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ObsidianFury117

I got ideas for some stories if you're interested. Just pick a topic/genre/category and I can get you some ideas.

LoFiLiveWire

@ObsidianFury117 I'll make sure to drop you a DM in the coming months. I'd love to have some help for my next story.
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LoFiLiveWire

I can't believe this has to be said
          
          Stop reporting everyone's comments. Especially on my stories, cause I don't find them offensive. If you do, suck it up. People are gonna say things that hurt your feelings. Move on.

Little_beloved101

@LoFiLiveWire Hipe you had a great thanksgiving!
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deGen3r4te

@LoFiLiveWire Nothing happens to the reported comments. There was one that I got and it said it was being moderated, but now a week or two later and the comment is still up.
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Empress__of__Hell

@LoFiLiveWire 
            Oh my god
            So that's why comments get the "this comment has been found offensive" thing? Because someone reports them?
            I thought it was because of the cursing that triggered such a thing in the system
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