LovelyTriniti

Hi. I see you have been upvoting my story(Thanks for enduring it although looking back, its quite cringe, aint it?) Any feedback?
          
          Just to give a heads up, the writing only tones down the cringe towards the last parts of Book 2.

Saw a horrible comment today (that was posted 5 months ago so no excuse to be ignorant imo) it said "straight just say straight" and it bothered me so bad. For context it was on a section for amab's sexuality which was Bisexual with a preference for women. I wrote one comment feeling very confident that I would post it but ultimately just put it in my clipboard. I don't want to fight people (definitely not online) especially on things that I'm 98% sure about. I kept looking thru other comment sections on the same chapter and saw a few more comments on other sexualities (like Omni) that were by the same person and others with similar opinions ig, I wrote another shorter comment, also put that in my clipboard. I'll put it here since I know no one will see it. First comment I made : "I'm a bi woman with a preference for women and a boyfriend who I love very much. Thank you author for representation of the immense spectrum of LGBTQ+! I'm not lesbian like the comment below me would impose. I'm a bi woman (whose also demi) who usually finds women more attractive. Sexuality isn't typically 50/50 to my knowledge at least." 
          My second comment: "Not loving the comment section so far, it's giving 'people should fit in one box!' and that's just not how sexuality works". 
          Some part of me still wants to post this in that commenters replies or even just in the comment section, maybe it'll soothe others that feel the same as I did but I'm a coward so I'll just block her and move on.

Ugh I just read a horrible comment that essentially was saying that because it was a gay couple it wasn't abuse it was just a fight. That pisses me off so bad! You do not hit people that you are in any type of relationship with (family, friends, romantic, sexual, ect) when you are supposed to, on some level care about them. That is abuse (physical atleast) it doesn't matter gender. You don't hit people you claim to love and care about! This comment was also trying to argue with someone saying that well then (for context a guy was beating up his boyfriend, another guy came in and beat up the abuser) guy c is also being abusive. That's not really how it works these two guys didn't even know each other, it also wasn't about having control and power over someone else. Them fighting is more idk how to explain it, it's not as damaging ig as if someone like your boyfriend decided to start beating you down. Personally even if they only punched me "a few" times  that would hurt mentally and emotionally more than if a total stranger decided to beat me to near death. I guess I should mention this was a black gay couple which may explain why this commenter was such an evil bitch. Black men are still people, they can get hurt. They do get abused and raped and sexually assaulted too. It's not as often or common as women but that doesn't mean that they deserve it either. Nobody deserves that shit!

Something i hate on here is that it's so fucking common that a character that's on the softer side (personality or like how they dress) are often infantilized. Which like there is communities that are into that but I am not one of them. I should say that these stories don't say they're apart of those communities nor do they put any related tags so to me it dosent belong in said story.
          I mainly try to read black stories and they're are so many stereotypes that I hate like if they're nice they're weak, if they're softer they need to protected and treated like a child (this is not to say someone shouldn't be protected, I love knowing that if I was in trouble my bf would do his best to protect me and vise versa and I love seeing that in stories), the same thing goes the other way too, tough people can't ever be vulnerable, can't cry or breakdown, people can't have flaws or character arcs. It's just so disappointing to read sometimes. 
          I should say I'm Bi so I read straight books, lesbian books, and gay books. I see these (imo harmful) stereotypes and more across all three.

Ugh it's one of those days where my brain is deciding to nitpick every sentence I read! "I am not going back" that doesn't make sense, people don't really speak like that especially when they're panicking and upset.  It'd only make sense if the character was like "I have to go back for them.", "I'm not leaving them (or leaving without them).", "I'm not going back (without them).", etc. People only say "I am" if they're trying to emphasize or prove a point like " I am going back for them!" , "I am staying." But usually this is said somewhat calmly during some type of aftermath (there's definitely been times in movies where someone is yelling or sobbing but still very determined and it is after).
          "He can be dead" That doesn't make sense. It's "He could be dead (already!).", "They could've killed him (for all we know)!" "He's dead.(!)" , etc. 
          "I love him too, but we got to get the fuck out of here" Personal preference I would've wrote "I love him too, but we need to get the fuck out of here!" Or " I love him too, but we need to stay alive (not die) first!"
          "As we were running he falls down." Now I might be wrong on this one but something in brain is telling me it's "As we were running he fell down." Or "As we're running he falls down."
          "She says running to the direction of the scream we hard" Personal preference again "She says running directly towards the scream."
          "I told you we shouldn't run away!" I think it's supposed to be " I told you we shouldn't have run away!" Or "I told you! We should've stayed!"
          "What did you wanted? That there's spread us as well as take us?" *Sigh* "What did you want us to do? They would've speared (hurt) and taken us too!"
          "They would kill him!" Would doesn't work there... "They will kill him!", "They're gonna kill him!", "They could've killed him!", "They might (might've) kill (killed) him!"
          "The good news is that means we can survive..." I'm not sure why this sentence doesn't sound right to me. "The good news, we can survive..."

I almost always write on here when something bothers me because I know nobody reads these. Now for my bother today. There's this game 'It's Just a Prank' one of those semi short horror games. *Spoilers Ahead* It's about this kid who constantly played pranks (it's a horror game so you can guess how it's gonna go here)
          I was watching one my favorite youtubers play it (I had seen other of my favorites play it already but not this particular duo) Everything was fine, I was reading some comments I thought it'd be fine because this channel I've never seen bad or mean comments at the top. I was reading this one comment something about Johan (the prankster) being a serial killer child which I completely agreed with then looked at the reply for that comment. I read it and thought ' you're so stupid bro!' That comment said something about Johan never had the intent to kill, it was an accident and he decided to blame it on Filip (the player). That's just complete bullshit. Johan exhibited behaviors common in serial killers. He killed small animals (rats) than escalated to slightly bigger animals (cats and dogs usually but he killed a badger it looked like) which is ugh. Another behavior is that he was so unempathetic. Agatha (the killed) was being abused by her violent and alcoholic dad, it was clear the teachers knew but didn't care (one teacher didn't discipline Agatha just sent her home. Game had good voice acting, I wasn't confused by tone.) The students (including Johan who had problems with Agatha's dad beforehand so definitely knew that guy could get scary) were scared of him and at the very least  understood that Agatha was in danger. Johan had got her in trouble in the very beginning of the game and lied that she was to blame (remember when I said the teacher didn't discipline her ) Filip was worried about her (and never met the man) but Johan brushed it all the way off he didn't give a shit. His "pranks" grew more and more cruel everytime.

So I finished watching aouad yesterday, I was watching with my mom whose a therapist (this is important I promise!) And you know the rooftop girl whose name I forgot we were like y'know I'm feeling bad for her because this bullying is going crazy but also she kinda makes me uncomfortable. We continue watching but whenever she comes on screen I make a remark like "I hate that something so horrible is happening to her but something feels off about her..." we get to episode 7 or 8 something like that and my mom snaps to get my attention and says "she's got school sh00ter energy!" And I go "oh my god you're so right!" Then she says "that's why you're feeling sympathetic but also like err she's not someone I'd wanna be around" I don't know how to explain the faces we made but suddenly my brain was like "oh my god she does give school sh00ter energy oh my god"then she blows my mind even more and says "he (rooftop boy) has that energy too not as apparent but it's there." Guess what happens next...the boy leaves the others knowing they're on the other side of the door!
          Anyways I'm sorry for anyone who reads this but it was circling in my brain since last night and I had to get it out somewhere!

Something I hate in the Harry Potter Fandom is that it's borderline impossible to find a black person or oc using search or tags. It's 95% of the time always a white person with the last name Black usually related to Sirius or Bellatrix, it's so infuriating! I wish there was a differentiated tag in the fandom for a person in the Black fandom instead of #blackoc #black #blackreader # blackgirl #blackwoman like am I crazy? It's not for you! It's to make it just a bit easier to find stories with black people! Am I tripping? Also it lowkey feels like I'm the only one who has this issue since I haven't seen anyone else upset about it on here... On another note I do wish more authors with a black main character would put it in their tags like that's the easiest way (for me atleast) to find a story in a particular fandom. Maybe I'm tripping idk...

Okay, I'm not a writer but I feel like the first paragraph of the first chapter has to be perfect. Like it should be cohesive and no misspellings because it's the first impression, the first hook. It tells you how the rest of the story may go so when I see the first paragraph have a few misspelled words and I have to read it a few times to try and understand it then it's a bad start personally.
          Now I'm not saying it has to be the most amazing paragraph ever or that the rest of the story can't have mistakes, mistakes happen, it's inevitable but that first part always feels like something people should put their best foot forward for. Idk if that makes sense or maybe I'm just tripping but I've left quite a few books the first chapter because the first writing felt lacking..

Idk why but there's some days where I think everyone on wattpad (commenters and authors) are annoying whiny little bitches and it's only bizarre because I know the day before I wouldn't have thought that in the slightest... maybe I should take a nap  reset myself or whatever..