PseudoScribbler

Hi hi! I hope you guys have heard this a MILLION times #blacklivesmatter I hope you guys are staying safe for the hundred of protests and marches across the globe and fighting for the right kind of change! ♥️

dgtor_official

Hi Scribs! (Can I call you scribs) 
          It's  Dibbles from AKBC
          Just finished reading quite a bit of your book.  I love the premise,  though that's a given based on how much I love BNHA.  I think your biggest issue isn't character development,  but your pacing.  It's  all good and well to skip details that your readers can infer,  but at times,  taking out info can leave readers confused. For example,  I'm not all sure what Inkus' powers we're in chapter two,  nor how he used them.  It's  also worth noting that I'm not aware of the trajectory the characters are on in terms of meeting each other.  All in all,  you've got a diamond that's still in the mines here. I can't waif to see it refined and set.

dgtor_official

Thanks!
             I'll just leave a review per chapter for the club assignments.
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PseudoScribbler

@HebzidaDibblez Oh thank you! Sorry I didn't get back to this sooner! Tests, like a hurricane Katrina. 
            
            Thank you for the critiques, I'm working on making Inkus' power more obvious, since it isn't really a secret! He can grow skin to look like someone else, so I'm going to work in more nudges at that in his first POV (and if that doesn't work, I'll hit readers over the head with it!)
            
            As for how everyone is going to meet up, it looks like you posted this critique JUST before they did <3  I hope their goals are a little clearer, aside from Inkus', after the first three chapters!
            
            Thank you again <3 yes, you can call be Scribs, Dibbles.
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ladyknight_star

Hiiiii

ladyknight_star

@PseudoScribbler you're most welcome
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PseudoScribbler

@absolutely_noone Aww tysm!
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ladyknight_star

@PseudoScribbler my pleasure. You're book is really interesting
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