YasharZA

Hey,
          I really liked your first chapter. One thing I didn’t want to mention in the comments was that you need to pay a bit more attention to grammatical errors and some tiny mistakes like “an elbow”. Try to re-read the chapters several times to fix them before posting them. Other than that, the story itself is very intriguing and waiting for the next chapters.

Qillmeplease

@ YasharZA  Thx! Appreciate it :D
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