@SpecialWilson6 I am sorry for the delay in my response and I really appreciate you asking. I usually would have a read and give feedback but unfortunately this is a very busy time for me. If I can in the near future I will definitely let you know. I used to be a teacher and helped students a lot with this sort of thing - in and out of school. Have you got someone in your life like a teacher or another person that you'd be comfortable sharing your work with? Alternatively, there are writers clubs and meetups help critique one another. It'd be a great start! All the best!